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"An Extended Performance" (2014) up on my FIMFiction Site

An Extended Performance

© 2014


Jordan S. Bassior

Chapter 1: Bait and Switch

Never trust other ponies

For far from the first time in her life, Beatrix Lulamoon, better known across the entire land of Equestria as The Great and Powerful Trixie, reminded herself of this well-learned truth, as she confronted her Manehattan agent, Bottom Billing.

"What do you mean," she said in a slow, measured tone, only the very slightest flicker of pale purple radiance playing about her horn, "by 'not quite Bridleway?'"

She was not threatening Bottom.  The Great and Powerful Trixie did not make idle threats, and the last time she had made a non-idle threat she had been forced to vacate a small desert town two steps ahead of an angry mob.  She had learned from that.  Grown.  Matured, even.  Besides, she wasn't entirely sure whether or not the sheriff had gotten a warrant out on her, so she considered it advisable to avoid any similar troubles in the future.

Though it had been an overreaction on their part.  The glow had been purely illusory, it had not been directed at the audience, and who knew that the tired old cliche about not shouting 'fire' in a crowded ... well, anyway, nopony had really gotten hurt.  Some ponies just couldn't deal with a truly spontaneous performance.

"Now, Trixie," Bottom said in a placatory tone, sidling around behind his large faux-oak desk (the stain was clearly off the plywood on the lower right front corner, oddly enough in  the shape of a hoof-print), "ya gotta to understand that only the most popular acts are gonna play Bridleway in Manehattan during the Summer Sun Celebration ..."


Will Trixie encounter any unpleasant surprises at this routine gig?  How much trouble could one little show-mare get into peforming until dawn at the Summer Sun Celebration of the year 1000?  Find out in An Extended Performance!

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Date:February 7th, 2014 07:07 pm (UTC)
I absolutely adored this. You combined lots of my favorite things (secondary characters, worldbuilding, and unconventional moments of badassery) and did them without turning Trixie into a poor innocent woobie. I loved that she saved the day (?) and that her growth was believable but not "OMG LOOK PERFECT MAGIC UNICORN!" Thanks for the good read!
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Date:February 8th, 2014 06:15 am (UTC)
I'm really glad you liked this.

My wife calls Trixie a "weirdo" and she is absolutely correct about this, both the way she's portrayed in canon and the way I expanded her personality in this novella. Trixie is a misfit: she would be a misfit as a human in our society, and she would be even more of a misfit among the Ponies (who are less violent and more gregarious than ourselves). She has a huge superiority complex which is in part a defense against crushing feelings of inadequacy at dealing with normal social interaction; she has serious problems keeping and making friends and the backstory with Piercing shows her fleeing from someone who obviously liked her and whom she liked back. She has very poor control over her temper; in the end she is inappropriately violent toward Bottom, burning her bridges in Manehattan. If she keeps this up, she's going to run out of venues.

What saves her from being a villain is that she has her own eccentric but strong moral code. She is a very reliable performer. She won't kill. And she has some healthy self-respect: she's not promiscuous (to be true, this is in part because she finds sex repulsive and scary) and she avoids drugs (and even mostly avoids alcohol, now).

And -- most relevant to the resolution of the story -- she's stubborn. If it comes to it, she will stand against horrors from beyond her world rather than back down when she thinks she's right (and has a chance of victory). Her unwillingness to yield is the monkey-wrench that wrecks the Shadow Coven's plans -- yes, they were defeated by the Alicorn Illusion, but had Trixie bolted, the Alicorn never would have awoken in the first place.

The term for her is "Jerkass Woobie" or "Jerk with a Heart of Gold." She really is arrogant, obnoxious and doesn't play well with others. But she's also a true heroine.
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